Feedback on Mr Teddy Opening titles

Below is our feedback on the Mr. teddy opening title sequence first screening and generally it is not the most pleasing feedback but the constructive criticisms will be worked upon to get a better resolution. Generally, people commented on the confusion of the opening title sequence as too much overlay of footage was evident for the narrative to be shown to the audience which I can understand as a lot is happening at once. So, this would be an edit change as the editing I think could possibly do with a bit less overlay as at one point there is two things happening at once in the filming, then a title comes up and then it just confusing obviously, this sets up enigmas but, we don't want a sense of ambiguity where nothing is understood as the narrative of our film won't be expressed.

Generally, the work that I did on the titles and movement where liked and credited but, I do think that the overall feel of the opening titles stylistically, is not fluid in transition therefore, offers confusion so it would probably be better to move the footage making the opening title sequence longer and then avoiding to use elliptical editing as two things at once proves confusing. To improve we could possibly consider making one piece of footage really light so it is barely see but, whatever happens there must be one focus instead of three.

One thing that I also know that I will need to change is the placement of the titles as I missed one important placing involving the director and it ended up being half way through the page not following the trend of the other titles so I plan to move that title down to the right corner in the bottom much like the others. In terms of the star rating I was not put off as still with the slight mistakes it was offered 2 stars and three stars which just proves that we have something to work with. 

The ending of our opening title sequence was praised and that was more simplistic then anything we had placed in the opening title sequence and just abided by the filming rather then more then two things going at once which I felt worked fantastically so, we could use this filming and this scenes and frames as a slight style modal and then constructively make our sequence much like this throughout. The editing I feel could possibly also aim to put my action in.